I'm turning this in for our character assignment thing. Rules were 20 lines, 5 adjectives (max), 2 particular fruits, something exotic, and the voice of your opposite sex.
A Trained Man's Discovery
8:45 a.m. I'm blue printing an ensemble,
preparing to match my genetic offspring,
flattering my wife—Debora; a genus
in the rose family, I eye the pear
shape of her body, region throughout the world
and surrender to casualties.
Today my family will be frozen,
made into preserves as well as dried
and used in such things as memorabilia.
With strawberry whitened teeth,
we'll fold perfection like the bath linen
expected after laundry day, that washed
away the previous night of beer, football,
and unpleasant smells, compared to skunk
spray or sewage.
Us men husked like Durian, kinged forbidden
the whole experience, partied until
my allotted funds ran out at 11:13 p.m.
I returned home as told, and my wife
she smiled with no effort satisfaction.
The beginning is a nice introduction of the traditional expectation, then you move beyond that and go into the man's head and how he perceives his family and what he prefers to do. Its embracing the element of escaping one reality, entering another, then slowly drifting back into the home life. I love how the wife is described, "a genus in the rose family". There are nice pictures being painting and its very enjoyable to read. You truly took on the other persona.
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