Response 18, Week 9

Queenie,

I like the way you describe a lady with spaghetti and food terminology it's just crazy. I think the format of this poem is intesting but I'm not sure what the shortening of the lines mean. Each line gets smaller and smaller. Is this trying to create some type of relationship? Like the way a man thinks of a lady... for her looks and other than that she isn't much, so shortening the lines is taking away from her? If it is I think you should create that relationship in this poem. Have a males character belittle this lady and make her just an object. I think that would be a really cool contrast for the poem but its just an idea. I really do like the way this female character is created. I want more to read lol