Response 17, Week 9

Samaria,
This is a really neat piece. I like the way you create this tease between a vegan and a carinivora. You have a clever play on words which is fun to read. I don't know how I feel about "I let it warm up use my tongue to
ice shave it off. " It reads too fast for me and the words don't make sense like that. Maybe there needs to be a puncuation break or a re-write of the sentence? Perhaps "I let it warm up, use my tounge, and ice shave it off." I think it slows the reading and makes it sound more intresting and someone more of a carvinoristic tease towards the vegan. But really I love the way you used such rich words and descriptions in this piece. It was very fun.