Response 9, Week 5

Kyley,
This was an intresting piece. I felt like the voice changes in the piece as the beginning starts as just a narrtive background scene being painted and then it goes to a childs point of view. It was intresting because it starts as this feeling of family... if family were a feeling and then it goes to a morbid mind of a child. Maybe if you exted this poem with the second element being the result of a crazy child created from I don't know divorced parents it would be cool. I definately feel like a lot of your work is darker and so working with a dark feeling might be a strength which is why I think a disturbed child resulted from divorce would be intersting. Anyway good work :)