Angela,
I really liked this piece! I liked the use of a Cobra to Stress. I love the language and choice of the words you used. I also like the pictures you paoint. Its really cool because I get a sene of stress from this piece bu you talk about a Cobra and how glass is created. Glass being created in the throat is just so intresting to me. I'm not sure how I feel about "steamed stiff" because when I say the line out loud it felt like too many "ST" like S was over used. It was kind of a tounge twister so I think the detail could maybe be switched up a little? You also have and intresting display for your words, so long and then short and then long. I like this free write.
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